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PSAT 1.1 Writing Diagnostic. How should the underlined portion be changed in the passage, if at all?

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Thank you We sneak And here's your shmoop douceur brought

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to you by traffic laws You're not required to stop

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in the name of love But whatever works for you

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All right check out this passage already I'm here No

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Depressing Alright how should the underlined portion be changed in

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the passage if at all including examples such as bullying

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or that alright here the potential answer You see the

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no change thing there and then a couple of ways

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of doing it all righty well is with all of

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these underlying type problems we're gonna want to start by

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going back to the passage to get some context Unfortunately

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we don't have to travel very far because well here

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it is didn't even have to break a sweat but

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here's a full sentence in which it appears video systems

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can help monitor passenger behaviour in this wait Negative actions

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including examples such as bullying or theft monitor traffic surrounding

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the vehicle and assistant recording observance of traffic laws and

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to enhance driver safety through as lot of of love

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of blobs That's probably right off the bat we can

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turn a cold children option eight because there's no way

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this sentence is a okay as it is including examples

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such as bullying or theft Well this makes it sounds

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as if bullying and theft or examples of examples government

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examples of negative actions which is what passages really trying

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to say so before we go too far down the

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rabbit hole and start winding up with example of example

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of example of examples let's cross this one out move

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on What about be where they change such as to

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like Well we appreciate them trying to put a valley

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girl spin on things Oh my god But such as

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and like are like totally the same thing the way

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the sentences phrase it's still calling bullying and theft examples

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and not types of behavior a subtle distinction But they

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were all about subtlety Yeah season over said see such

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as bully or theft for example Well it's definitely getting

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closer since that at least conveys the intended point Unfortunately

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there's a tad too much repetition here also there is

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a tad too much repetition here That jazz and for

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example are basically the same thing Sounds like someone's trying

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to stretch things out to meet a word Count requirements

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were shocked They didn't throw a heretofore or in a

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cz much in there so long Well then the correct

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answer has to be deep such as bullying or theft

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And indeed it is such as ties bullying or theft

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To the description that immediately precedes it In this sense

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negative actions And unless you're bullying a bully or stealing

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someone's heart those two are certainly negative actions So it

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is inasmuch as we heretofore have hitherto concluded that ok 00:02:49.63 --> [endTime] we have to hit our word count right now

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